Fiction Stuff

[caraig]

Remember "Hiwon," that kind of creepy story that came from a dream I had? A few days ago I had "Hiwon's" brother. And I tried to write it down and expand on it, but unfortunately I got out of the writing mood later that day and didn't get it finished. And so this one has a pretty lame ending, kind of not knowing where to go. So please feel free to critique it, and be as brutal as you need to be. I added a title/logo to it as practice for graphics design and to see what I could make a computer-generated image do. Here is the story itself. Enjoy. Pax.

Comments

[sodon.livejournal.com]

Very disturbing. Reminds me of "The Village", only without the weird ending. Of course, I have some debate in my mind as to whether or not the "monster" in said movie was really a farce at all, but you certainly make no bones about it in yours, or at least, you don't say it's a farce yet. So it's definitely disturbing. Why I read crap like this and make myself depressed is beyond me, but you did a good job =P

[caraig.livejournal.com]

M. Night Shyamalan does some very, very good things with his cinematography, at least for about two-thirds to three quarters of his films. After that he just can't hold it in anymore and simply MUST show the audience what the monster is. However, there's probably a lot of Shyamalan's influence in those stories of mine, since I found Signs to be quite scary for about half the movie, and even The Village was scary for the large majority of the film. I think another influence was The Ring but thinking too much of that movie still makes me jumpy at this time of night, so I'm not even going to go there!

The monsters definitely aren't farces, though as I've said above I'm not enitrely sure just what they are, yet. They're quite real for the story-world and very much a threat. What their natures are, though, is still yet to be determined. I'm probably going to wait for another dream that involves something like them before I write of them again. Who knows? Maybe there'll be some hint as to what they are next time. Though admittedly I'm not enitrely looking forward to another dream with them.

[sodon.livejournal.com]

Of course, that would imply you already know the answer, somewhere in that disturbed mind of yours =P