Writing Stuff

Some new fiction for your perusal. I would like some hard criticism of it... at least, if you can scramble through the morass that I tend to make of my writing. -.- This is basically me declaring open season on it, so stand by on the guns, commence primary ignition, and fire at will. ^^

Here it is.
Capsule: "Fall" is set in roughly the same cosmology as the "Eidolon" snippets, though it is less an exploration of metacosmology posing as a story, as it is a study in corruption posing as a story. The question of "how good people turn bad" has been a trying one for philosophers, and one I'm trying to explore for my own writing. Nothing is set in stone in this story; even Annith's background and attitudes are felxible. Ideally, in final form, I wish to make her transition have impact and yet also be believable.

Pax.

EDIT: Forgot.... HTML does not like quotes within quotes. Thanks, yotogi.